In this post, I will be referring to my This I Wonder Essay and why I chose certain scenes to incorporate in my essay.
“10, 9, 8,” I heard Taylor start the countdown
“Am I really going to do this? Am I really about to jump?” I wondered as I stood 5 feet from the edge of a 60 foot cliff.
I wanted to start my essay off on this because I feel that it really grabs the attention of my audience to keep them intrigued with my essay.
“Holy f&@*” Sean and Thomas said almost in unison. They were the first two at the top and were looking over the edge. If you thought it was overwhelming to look at the cliffs from across the quarry, imagine how intimidating it was to be looking down from the top. We bickered at each other about who would jump first.
I wanted to include this scene because I feel it sets in the reality my group of friends and I felt as we stood on top of the massive cliff. It brings the audience closer to the emotions felt by all of us at the time.
“10, 9, 8,” I heard Taylor start the countdown
“Am I really going to do this? Am I really about to jump? How could I have let those drunk idiots convince me to do this?” I wondered as I stood 5 feet from the edge of a 60 foot cliff.
I wanted to provide this insight to my thoughts because I wanted to provide the audience with a piece of not only what was being said aloud, but what was also going through my head.
The free fall was exhilarating. I couldn't scream, I couldn't breathe, I was just falling.
This line I feels brings that finalizing moment to my audience as they can imagine how I felt as I fell through the air into the unknown.
I stood at the top of that cliff and doubted myself. My mind told me I didn't have the courage or strength to overcome that fear of jumping. But I did and I have never been so proud of myself. It was one of the most terrifying, but at the same time the most exhilarating experience of my life.
This excerpt is important to me because it brings to attention what jumping meant to me in the end.
“Am I really going to do this? Am I really about to jump?” I wondered as I stood 5 feet from the edge of a 60 foot cliff.
I wanted to start my essay off on this because I feel that it really grabs the attention of my audience to keep them intrigued with my essay.
“Holy f&@*” Sean and Thomas said almost in unison. They were the first two at the top and were looking over the edge. If you thought it was overwhelming to look at the cliffs from across the quarry, imagine how intimidating it was to be looking down from the top. We bickered at each other about who would jump first.
I wanted to include this scene because I feel it sets in the reality my group of friends and I felt as we stood on top of the massive cliff. It brings the audience closer to the emotions felt by all of us at the time.
“10, 9, 8,” I heard Taylor start the countdown
“Am I really going to do this? Am I really about to jump? How could I have let those drunk idiots convince me to do this?” I wondered as I stood 5 feet from the edge of a 60 foot cliff.
I wanted to provide this insight to my thoughts because I wanted to provide the audience with a piece of not only what was being said aloud, but what was also going through my head.
The free fall was exhilarating. I couldn't scream, I couldn't breathe, I was just falling.
This line I feels brings that finalizing moment to my audience as they can imagine how I felt as I fell through the air into the unknown.
I stood at the top of that cliff and doubted myself. My mind told me I didn't have the courage or strength to overcome that fear of jumping. But I did and I have never been so proud of myself. It was one of the most terrifying, but at the same time the most exhilarating experience of my life.
This excerpt is important to me because it brings to attention what jumping meant to me in the end.